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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#schools #government
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The
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government
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 funding is necessary for
schools
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 to provide an education with
a reasonable
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reasonable fees
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fees
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.
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,
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this
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these
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 funds should only be
availabke
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available
 to the
government
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schools
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 and not to the private
one
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ones
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 as the private
school
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's
fees
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 are high and the people who can afford the
fees
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 are studying there. Generally, the
government
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school
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's motto is to
to
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apply
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provide
the
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apply
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education to each child regardless
their
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of their
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 family's income. With the help of
the
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apply
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government
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 funding,
schools
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 can pay teacher's
salary
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salaries
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 and without asking
huge
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for huge
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amount
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amounts
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 of
fees
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, educate the children. From the tax,
certain
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a certain
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 amount is decided to
alot
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a lot
allot
 to the
school
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 so that
every
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everyone
each
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 can afford to go to
school
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 and study. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, the private
school
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's fee structure is so high that only higher middle class and rich people can afford to go there.
Private
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The private
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school
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 has
donation
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a donation
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 system and they can charge huge amount that they do not need fundings from the
government
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.
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, one student with 45% wants to study in
private
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a private
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school
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, due to
less
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fewer
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 marks he is not able to get
the
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apply
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admission that time the
school
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 will offer them
donation
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a donation
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 quota to enrol them. With the
helop
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help
 of students'
fees
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,
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the school
a school
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school
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schools
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 can pay teachers and other expenses. Since the private
schools
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couldnt
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couldn't
 provide more activities due to
lack
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the lack
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 of
less
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fewer
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fees
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, they need aid from the outside. In conclusion, less fortunate kids go to
the
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apply
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government
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school
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 due to the fact that
fees
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 are very low so it is beneficial to give funding aid to
the
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apply
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public
school
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 only rather than
the
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apply
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private
one
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ones
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.
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