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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter -explain why you should like the job -give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ -say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding your published advert to recruit a person to look after your six-year-aged children. My eligibility for
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 post is explained below. My interaction with young people is trained in the developed world, and I relish children's companionship from my early childhood.
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 enjoyment, my experience dealing with teenagers came from an earlier experience as a teacher in the local primary school of my own country;
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, my affection for kids forces me to apply for
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 opportunity. My qualification and relevant training are completed in Perth, Australia at a community college;
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, I am already aware of societal norms and responsibilities for the locals.
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, my application ought to get special consideration of yours, in my view. My leisure time will be spent
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visiting friends in Sydney, who go out almost every weekend.
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, my fascination
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drawing
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 can be explored
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 by admitting myself
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 the regional art’s college and performing
household
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the household
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task
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yours
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. I am awaiting your response. Yours faithfully, Marry

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • caregiver
  • childcare experience
  • passion for children
  • responsibility
  • patience
  • commitment
  • cultural immersion
  • local environment
  • community engagement
  • flexibility
  • references
  • qualifications
  • volunteer work
  • educational background
  • suitable candidate
  • enthusiasm
  • positive impact
  • personal attributes
  • willingness
  • explore
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