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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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The bar chart compares the different ages of people living in Iceland between 1990 and 2020. All in all, the
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 of the 25-54
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 increased the most over the period while the
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 of the two younger
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 groups decreased a little bit. The number of people in the two older
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 groups stayed about the same. The 25-54
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 grew from approximately a
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 of the
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 in 1990 to nearly half of the
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 in 2020. The older two
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 groups did not increase or decrease much. The
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 of the 65 and over
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 remained at about 13%, whereas the
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 of the 55 -64
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 only fell from about 14% to about 10% of the
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, the 0-14
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 fell from just over 25% in 1990 to just under 20% in 2020.
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, the 15-24
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 dropped from just over 20% of the
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 in 1990 to just under 10% of the
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 in 2020.
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