Prison sentences are often too light, and crime rates are growing in many major cities. Capital punishment is necessary and good Do you agree or disagree?

The maps illustrate the university
sports
centre nowadays and
plans
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for its development. Overall, it is clear, that
sports
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centre is going to pass through
the
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huge changes. At
first
two
outdoor courts,
that is
projected to be removed and replaced by the main building,
that
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will be enlarged . It is
also
planned to build Leisure pool,
second
changing room,
Sports
hall and enlarge gym.
Currently
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there is a small main building but
two
outdoor courts on the west and east of the main building.
Main
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building is projected to be enlarged
in
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cost
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the cost
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of
two
outdoor courts. The main building has only five rooms.
First
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one is
reception
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, it will be left
on
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its place, but enlarged and
sports
shop and cafe will be added, changing room, seating and pool will remain exactly the same and gym will be enlarged. It is
also
projected to add
two
extra changing rooms,
leisure
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pool,
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a sports
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hall and
two
dance studios.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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