The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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illustrates
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the
enormlents
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enrolments
enrolment
of foreign
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and local
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in
Auatralia
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Australian
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universities over a
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peiod
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period
.
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, what stands out from the
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, is that there is provided
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a
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enormous gap between Commencing and
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the Total
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amount of
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at the beginning of the period.
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there
also
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can be seen that Commencing amount of
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on both
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is lower than in
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rate
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. Looking at the details, on the Overseas
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chart both lines is starting approximately from
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one point.
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rate
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is making
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from 20000 to approximately 80000 amount of
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in comparison with Commencing
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.
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Also
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there is can be
conssidered
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considered
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. Regarding
Local
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the Local
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Students
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graph, Commencing
rate
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is steadily declining from 2001 to 2010. Following that,
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rate
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is increasing totally from 400000 to approximately 600000
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, in comparison with
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rate
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on the same graph.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words graphs, students, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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