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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
graphs
illustrates
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 the
enormlents
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enrolments
enrolment
 of foreign
students
 and local
students
 in
Auatralia
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Australian
Australia
 universities over a
ten year
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ten-year
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peiod
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period
.
Overall
, what stands out from the
graphs
, is that there is provided
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a
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 enormous gap between Commencing and
Total
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the Total
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 amount of
students
 at the beginning of the period.
Next
,
threre
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there
also
 can be seen that Commencing amount of
students
 on both
graphs
 is lower than in
Total
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the Total
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rate
. Looking at the details, on the Overseas
Students
 chart both lines is starting approximately from
the
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apply
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one point.
Then
,
Total
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the Total
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rate
 is making
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a surge
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surge
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 from 20000 to approximately 80000 amount of
students
 in comparison with Commencing
rate
.
Also
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,Also
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 there is can be
conssidered
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considered
 a huge gap between
graphs
. Regarding
Local
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the Local
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Students
 graph, Commencing
rate
 is steadily declining from 2001 to 2010. Following that,
Total
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the Total
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rate
 is increasing totally from 400000 to approximately 600000
students
, in comparison with
opposite
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the opposite
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rate
 on the same graph.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graphs, students, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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