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the averge carbon Dioxide emission per prison in four various counties in five different year with 10 years interval, salting from 1967.

The given line graph illustrates the information about the average
carbon
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Dioxide
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 emission per prison in four various counties in five different years with 10 years interval, salting from 1967. The general overview here is that There was an increasing number of
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dioxide
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 emissions in Italy and Portugal, while Britain and Sweden decreased. According to the graph, it can be seen that in 1967, the highest number of
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dioxide
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 emissions was The UK,accounting for over 10
tonnes
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 per person, followed by Sweden with the figure of just over 8
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. There was a significant movement 40 years later, the figure for The UK dropped gradually to just over 8
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 in 2007, while Sweden experienced an increase to over 10
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 in 1977.
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,
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 number fell dramatically to under 6
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 over passing 30 periods.
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, Italy and Portugal experienced a similar upward trend, between 1967 and 20017, with Italy rising from approximately 4
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 in 1967 to almost 8
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 after four decades.
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, in Portugal with a similar sharp acceleration of
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dioxide
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 discharge in the same period, its amount reached almost 8
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.

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