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There are different customs in different countries related to how people eat, dress, and so on. Some think that people visiting a country should behave according to customs of the country they visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#customs #countries #people #dress #think #country #visit
Every
country
's
customs
,
such
 as food, costumes
are varies
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 from nation to nation, and a handful of individuals hold the belief that when people
visiting
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visit
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 a foreign
country
 ,they should abide
that
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country
's
customs
. In my opinion,
i
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 strongly agree with
this
 point of view. When people
visiting
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visit
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aboard
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abroad
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, they should behave like the local
peole
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people
, regarding the
customs
 of the
country
. Because when you go to a foreign
country
,
follow
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following
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 that
country
's
custom
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customs
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 is a way to show that you respect that
country
's culture. If you don't behave according to the
custom
 of that
country
, sometimes you may
offended
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 the local people, due to there may have some cultural
tebus
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tabus
bus
 in that
country
, so when you go to a foreign
country
,
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 and behave
according
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 the
country
 you visit,
tha
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that
 will be
a
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 best way to show that you respect that
country
's
custom
. So
peole
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people
 should behave according to the
custom
 of that
country
.
Additionally
, going to aboard is a really good way to experience foreign
cultural
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, if you follow their
customs
, you can learn more about that
country
, Borden our horizons.
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