the number of elderly people in the world in inreasing. What do you think are the positive and negative effects of this trend?

Many industrialized

countries

are becoming

an

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ageing

societies

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, which holds an increasing

number

of populations in old

age

. While

this

trend is likely to be seen as social drawbacks, there are apparently

both

pros and cons. A

society

with a considerate

number

of elder adults can not only lead to a well-matured

democracy

but

also

helps

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with building multilateral cooperation between

nations

.

For

instance

, a

population

with a lot of the old would make a better political decision, which turns our

democracy

to a right

a

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direction.

In addition

, since the growing

population

tend to require the economic expansion of

nations

, a steady

population

late would facilitate maintaining the international bond in various global

issues

.

On the other hand

, the high

ratio

of elderly

people

can cost extra

pension

, as well as reduce the total

income

from working

age

. The fewer working

people

will reduce the amount of

income

and make it difficult to economically

support

the old with a

pension

many industrialized

countries

are becoming an ageing

society

, which holds an increasing

number

of populations in old

age

. While

this

trend is likely to be seen as social drawbacks, there are apparently

both

pros and cons. A

society

with a considerate

number

of elder adults can not only

leads

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a

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well-matured

democracy

but

also

help with building multilateral cooperation between

nations

.

For

instance

, a

population

with a lot of the old would make a better political decision, which turns our

democracy

to

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in

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a

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right direction.

In addition

, since the growing

population

tend to require the economic expansion of

nations

, a steady

population

late would facilitate maintaining the international bond in various global

issues

.

On the other hand

, the high

ratio

of elderly

people

can cost extra

pension

, as well as

reduces

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the total

income

from working

age

. The fewer working

people

will reduce the amount of

income

and make it difficult to economically

support

the old with a

pension

.

For example

, some

countries

diminished the

pension

price or even abolished

one

due to the demographical

changes

.

Besides

, there is a high possibility that a

country

will become very conservative with a great

number

of

people

. An older

country

tends to make radical

changes

in

policies

and may spend more money on social

welfare

than childcare

support

.

For

instance

, Japan is

one

of the ageing societies and its

policies

are inclined to elderly concerns ,not the young,

such

as immigrant policy or

pension

budget.

Thus

, if the

ratio

of old

people

increases in the total national

population

, the

country

will have

both

advantages and disadvantages. It will

cause

a better democratic and cooperative

society

,

on the contrary

, it will

cause

several

issues

on maintaining economics and social

welfare

. .

For example

, some

countries

diminished the

pension

price or even abolished

one

due to the demographical

changes

.

Besides

, there is a high possibility that a

country

will become very conservative with a great

number

of

people

. An older

country

tends to make radical

changes

in

policies

and may spend more money on social

welfare

than childcare

support

.

For

instance

, Japan is

one

of the

aging

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societies and its

policies

are inclined to elderly concerns ,not the young,

such

as immigrant policy or

pension

budget.

Thus

, if the

ratio

of old

people

increases in the total national

population

, the

country

will have

both

advantages and disadvantages. It will

cause

a better democratic and cooperative

society

,

on the contrary

, it will

cause

several

issues

on maintaining economics and social

welfare

.