If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
If people
been
asked about one thing to change about their own town Wrong verb form
are
then
there will be plenty of options they have. Similarly
, there is one thing that I want to introduce strict law
against Fix the agreement mistake
laws
pollution
. This
essay will elaborate on my view in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, In my hometown, there is a lot of rubbish everywhere. This
motivates me to organize a volunteer club to help me to clean this
rubbish. If I could I will
establish more trash cabs to pick up the garbage from streets and roads. Wrong verb form
would
Moreover
, I would like to adopt the rules and regulations of Japan regarding cleanliness. In Japan, in front of every home, there is a recycle bin in which they can recycle biodegradable things.
In addition
, in my hometown pollution
is increasing day by day. I would like to install windmills to refresh the air. There is also
another big reason for air pollution
such
as more private vehicles on the road. It emits carbon dioxide which polluted
the quality of the air. Whenever I get a chance I would like to arrange some seminars regarding the dangers of Wrong verb form
pollutes
pollution
. I will motivate people to use public transport instead
of own
private vehicles. Most people follow the rules because of fear of punishment so I would Correct pronoun usage
their own
also
like to legislate the penalty for polluting.
To conclude
, if I get an opportunity to change one Change preposition
of this
this
in my hometown I will introduce Correct pronoun usage
these
more
strict laws regarding cleanliness and Correct quantifier usage
apply
pollution
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