If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

If people
been
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are
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asked about one thing to change about their own town
then
there will be plenty of options they have.
Similarly
, there is one thing that I want to introduce strict
law
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laws
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against
pollution
.
This
essay will elaborate on my view in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, In my hometown, there is a lot of rubbish everywhere.
This
motivates me to organize a volunteer club to help me to clean
this
rubbish. If I could I
will
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would
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establish more trash cabs to pick up the garbage from streets and roads.
Moreover
, I would like to adopt the rules and regulations of Japan regarding cleanliness. In Japan, in front of every home, there is a recycle bin in which they can recycle biodegradable things.
In addition
, in my hometown
pollution
is increasing day by day. I would like to install windmills to refresh the air. There is
also
another big reason for air
pollution
such
as more private vehicles on the road. It emits carbon dioxide which
polluted
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pollutes
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the quality of the air. Whenever I get a chance I would like to arrange some seminars regarding the dangers of
pollution
. I will motivate people to use public transport
instead
of
own
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their own
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private vehicles. Most people follow the rules because of fear of punishment so I would
also
like to legislate the penalty for polluting.
To conclude
, if I get an opportunity to change one
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this
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these
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in my hometown I will introduce
more
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apply
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strict laws regarding cleanliness and
pollution
.
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