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There are different customs in different countries related to how people eat, dress, and so on. Some think that people visiting a country should behave according to customs of the country they visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Different
countries
 have different customs, and in recent years, more and more
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people
 love to travel other
countries
, and a handful of
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individuals
 hold the belief that travellers should pay attention to the culture of the country, which is their destinations. In my option,
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 strongly agree with
this
 point of view that
peole
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people
 should consider the customs of the country, which
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. I will discuss my opinion below.
Firstly
, each country has different moral and legal rules that are expected to be obeyed by people including citizens and tourists. When an individual decides to travel to other
countries
 they should learn about their traditions and cultures in order to show his or her respect toward them.
In addition
, if they want to have an enjoyable experience without making uncomfortable situations for themself they should find out about acceptable behaviours in a foreign society.
For instance
, in UEA it is an uncommon
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 to wear a revealing top for women and
therefore
 UEA residents would feel that her attitude is out of the moral codes of the society.
Secondly
,the aim of a trip is to experience different cultures and attitudes ,while you are searching about acceptable actions in other
countries
, you would become familiar with international customs,which you are going to deal with them when you reach that places.
Moreover
, if you act according to codes of behaviours the communication would be easier and
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yo
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 can find new friends while making new relationships.
For instance
, Koreans would show their respect to each other via bowing and
therefore
 if you act the same as them they might consider you a venerable person. In conclusion, I think that in order to not transgress, visitors should expand their knowledge, regarding their destinations,
besides
, it would be an educational trip for them if they search about abroad.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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