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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter -remind him when and where you met -tell him what kind of job you are interested in -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Mr Jan, Hope your journey was enjoyable. I am writing with reference to our casual chat during our journey together from Canada to India. As discussed, I am writing to enquire about some possible jobs in one of your restaurants. I would like to express my interest in the position of Manager as I have recently graduated from the University of Canada with a specialization in Hotel Management. I have completed my undergraduate degree with a specialization in cooking.
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, I have completed my internship with the hotel Hayat in Canada. I will surely be the best fit for
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 a position as I believe my internship experience will be of great help to accomplish all the tasks for your restaurant. I am
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 open to the position of a chef as I have to collect funds for the execution of my future plan to start my own restaurant. I would be grateful if you could help in offering me a job. I have attached my resume in which I have included all my achievements. My contact number is 9952952892. Awaiting a positive response. Thank you. Yours sincerely, Subashree Krishnan.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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