Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

It is obviously true that many
people
are facing so many health problems
such
as diabetes or obesities which are because of eating high levels of sugar that includes in foods and drink
products
that made by manufacturing companies. In my opinion,
although
I agree that making sugary
products
more expensive to reduce consumption is a curial way, I do believe that enlightening them for the awareness of the harmful of using sugary
products
.
To begin
with, it is a great method of encouraging them to utilize less oversweet
products
by overpricing the
products
.
In other words
, it is making that not many
people
are able to buy those ones because of raising the prices.
For example
, there are so many confectioneries
such
as producing sweets or chocolates,
however
, not all
people
are able to purchase those food items because these were overpriced compared with other countries.
This
results in controlling them over usage of confectionary
products
and to get wealth health.
However
,
this
is not only a way to control
people
from overusing food
that is
made of sugary and enlightening the public to be aware of how those
products
can be risky if they eat more than enough.
For instance
, most
people
are willing to eat whatever they love to eat like smoking even though those are very expensive.
Therefore
, the government should plan to enlighten the public to know the dangers of eating sugary
products
and how many calories can be gained because of it and what are the bad consequences of eating sweet food.
This
way,
people
might acknowledge the risks. To sum up, despite I believe that sweet
products
should be overpriced to manage the
people
by eating them, I think that enlightening to be conscious about the dangers of those items.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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