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The world of work is changing rapidly . Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life . Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work in the future .

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Following globalisation, Woking ethics rapidly changed.
Moreover
,
environment
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 for work has shown drastic
change
 as compared to the past.
Also
, the reliance of
human
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 race is not confined to
single
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the single
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job
 but prefer more
then
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than
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one
job
 at a time.
This
 essay will discuss, what are the reasons for
this
change
 and will put forward that how
people
 should prepare for jobs in near future. Analysing the effect of
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the difference
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difference
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differences
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 in working ethics,
one
 can realise that in
this
 modern world we all are under the Influence of
technology
. Which is, the most important reason for
this
change
.
Working
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The working
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 environment depends on computers and
internet
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the internet
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, as everything is easily accessible while sitting
on
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at
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one
 desk.
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,
research
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a research
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 article
of
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by
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university
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the university
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 of California shows,
people
 are ten times more
globalise
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globalised
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 as compared they were in the past.
This
 effect is because of
technology
 and media.
People
 working in
UNITED
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the UNITED
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 KINGDOM have established companies in the Asia part of the world.
Secondly
, companies are getting more efficient in saving their cost while developing
less
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fewer
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 offices and skyscrapers.
Therefore
, workers are having
better
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a better
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 lifestyle and have better family life while staying home and connecting to
people
 from all over the world.
As a result
,
people
 are opting for more
then
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than
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one
job
 at a time because of less travelling, less investment these opportunities has
open
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opened
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 the doors for employees to finish their
desire
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desired
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 task for
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the
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first
job
 and start working for another.
On the other hand
, labour jobs are more or less the same.
As a result
,
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working-class
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working
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the working
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 class
,
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apply
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 should prepare themselves as being more advance in
technology
. Because
this
 is the future. To conclude,
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the augmentation
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 of
technology
 has changed the entire working environment and will be changing more in the near future.
This
 in return has given individuals a
previlage
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privilege
 to work for dual jobs at a time and not to rely on
one
 .
Working
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The working
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 force needs to be more technical in artificial intelligence to maintain
this
change
 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological integration
  • enhanced productivity
  • job requirements
  • globalization
  • the gig economy
  • freelance work
  • traditional employment models
  • work-life balance
  • lifelong learning
  • adaptability
  • soft skills
  • hard skills
  • transferable skills
  • networking
  • professional relationships
  • digital literacy
  • technological proficiency
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