Many people today are choosing to travel to other countries. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there is a big deal of countries with their various culture, traditions, customs and level of
life
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. Many people have a lot of opportunities and variative choice where to have a rest or live.
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why there is a trend of selecting to travel abroad
instead
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of doing research on the
motherland
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. Mostly,
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adventure beneficially influences
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our society ,
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there is
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another side.
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,
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lives of people have dramatically changed. A few years ago, in order to get to a certain destination, an individual had to donate his time, a large amount of cash and other staff. Today, with highly developed technologies,
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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, numerous public have
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more opportunities and resources, to choose more interesting places to live or travel. So
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of having a journey in the area that they are already aware
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, they decide to look at totally different
culture
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cultures
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,
countries
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and countries
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.
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, in the past, in order to get to
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destination in one side of the country from another, a few
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mothers
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in modern times, it requires 9 hours to get from Uzbekistan to
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the USA
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. Another reason
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is that
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has a desire to reach
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, than in the country where he lives.
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,
person
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a person
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will not have
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to
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the motherland
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.
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, the individual may begin to think about
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where
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was born, simply like
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and no more. For
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instance
, when
person
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a person
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has myriad
countries
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of countries
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to compare, he most likely will look at
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an area
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area
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with
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and may start to look negatively,
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the
motherland
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, in my
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this
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situation is uncommon. On
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hand, he would start to consider
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his
motherland
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whole
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Earth
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rather than a certain piece of it. In conclusion,
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amount of people nowadays have enough
resourses
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resources
to search
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lands to travel
.
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This
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trend
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provides humanity with more
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beneficial
sides rather than inferior ones. It is important to mention, that humanity, everyday
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increase
icrease
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increases
the speed of development, and many persons increase their
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life
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every single day, so it
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would
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adventure inferiorly impacts
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humanity
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancements in transportation
  • Cultural curiosity
  • Economic reasons
  • Globalization
  • Educational opportunities
  • Digital nomadism
  • Healthcare tourism
  • Tourism industry growth
  • Personal development
  • Interconnectedness
  • Higher living standards
  • Remote work
  • Broaden their horizons
  • Affordable travel
  • Medical treatments
  • Global perspective
  • Air travel options
  • Cuisines
  • Lifestyles
  • Job opportunities
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