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The annual number of rentals or sales of films in various formats from one particular store between 2002 and 2011

The bar graph summarises and compares the annual
number
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 of
rentals
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 or
sales
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 of films in various formats from one particular store between 2002 and 2011. In 2002, people preferred to rent most of the films with more than 1,80,000
rentals
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 in the same year. But, over the
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 10 years, the
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 of
rentals
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 has seen a persistently downward trend with just above 50,000 in the year 2011. As far as the VHS
sales
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 are concerned, 80,000 was the highest
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 over the decade which were sold in 2002. Since
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, there has been a dramatic fall in the demand for VHS. They were taken off the shelf from 2006. The DVD
sales
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 in 2002 were less than 50,000 in 2002. Its purchases skyrocketed in the
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 5 years and the most
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 of DVDs were sold in 2007, which were a little more than 2,10,000. After 2008, there has been a slight decline in its
sales
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 with about 1,80,00 being sold in 2011.
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, Blu-ray
sales
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 were non-existent before 2006. People started buying films in the Blu-ray format after 2007. Its purchases have shown a small increase up to a little above 10,000 by the year 2011. To sum up, film
rentals
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 have been steadily decreasing over the years, VHS has become a thing of the past, Blu-ray
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 are picking up the pace while DVDs are still holding the fort strong enough.

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