The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map provided the changes

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West

Park

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Secondary

School

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which occurred from 1950 to 2010. First, houses and farmland were replaced significantly. The houses were replaced by

the

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car

park

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and a science block was built

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to the

school

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. Among all facilities and fields, farmland was changed the most, it was refurbished into a sports field in1980. After that, it became the extension of the car

park

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in 2010.

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due to

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the expansion of the car

park

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during the given period, the sports field and the playground were shrunk to approximately half the size.

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, the science block had remained the same size since it was added by the side of the main building of the

school

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between 1980 and 2010. In summary, the location of the main road and the

school

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did not have

modification

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modifications

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Although

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the science block was built and

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apply

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remained

the

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that

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size, other fields had an obvious transformation.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

156 words

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Water pollution has been an increasing problem over the last few decades. What are the causes and effects of water pollution?

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