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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantage for the environment?

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It is no secret that the world is filled with different
images
 fighting for our attention. Most advertisers and communicators have come to understand that
images
 are effective tools of communication in the
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This
 essay will discuss the effectiveness of
images
 and movies as a mode of communication. They say a picture is worth one thousand words. In the information technology age, more adverts that are effective and yield high returns on investment are the ones with few letters but lots of
images
. Advertisers have understood
this
 means and as
such
 a larger percentage of their online contents are pictorial. A study conducted by the body responsible for regulating online content shows that 67.8% of every
adverts
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 online are mainly pictorial as opposed to complete letters.
This
 is an indication that the use of
Images
 for the transfer of information is on the rise globally.
Although
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 some may argue that some messages cannot be captured with pictures,
this
 is where the little letters come in.
Furthermore
, more and more teaching materials are scattered with different diagrams and pictures to aid learning. Teachers are employing the use of short movies and
diagrammes
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diagrams
 to make learning conducive to learners most especially kids and toddlers of school age. The rate at which
student
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 quickly understand complex ideas is increasing
as a result
pictorial
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 learning tools. In some countries where teachers are not close by, a complete topic has been thought with the aid of videos and the student don’t have issues with comprehending it. In conclusion, the use of visuals as a means of communication is now the most prominent form of advertisement online and a growing trend as a teaching aid most especially for school children.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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