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There are different customs in different countries related to how people eat, dress, and so on. Some think that people visiting a country should behave according to customs of the country they visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globalization is the integration of people from all over the globe which has been increasing dramatically for the past 100 years. In today's ,world it is easy to travel across the world and witness
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completely different cultures, religions and customs. Each region across the globe has different systems for everything.
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,in the Middle east its customary for women to cover up and dress modestly, whilst in the
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States there is no
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 thing as it is normal for women to reveal their skin and dress without rules. In Japan if you enter a house you must take your shoe's off out of respect,
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 in Europe shoes stay on.
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, I believe it is important to be aware of the country's customs before visiting for multiple reasons
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 as : not disrespecting the locals, avoiding a cultural shock when visiting a new city and being aware of the food options that will be mainly available that will suit you.
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, I believe that respect should be shown when visiting another place
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 it is not very necessary to follow all the customs as locals do.
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