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the figure for male and female in further education in The UK in three various periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

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The given bar chart illustrates the information about the figure for males and females in
further
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 education in The UK in three various periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. The general overview here is that both men and women were the most of the number of part-time education. According to the bar chart, it can be seen that males experienced a downward trend in the number of a past-time studying, which was a slight drop from exactly 1000
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 in 1970 to approximately 900
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 in 1990.
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, there was a sharp increase in
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 figure for women, rising from just under 800
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 to over 1000
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 in the same period. In terms of full-time education. Males and females shared a similar acceleration trend. From 1971 to 1991, the figure for men rose minimally to just over 200
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, women experienced a steady escalation after passing 30 years, accounting for approximately 300
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