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the center of a tiny town called Birshire as it is now, and planes for its development.

The given maps compare the centre of a tiny town called Berkshire as it is now and plans for its development. The general overview here is that the town will have undergone a considerable transformation after the construction takes place. According to the
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, it can be seen that all farms from Berkshire will have been removed in the days to come. Griffiths Farm, which is in the top right corner of the
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 will have been replaced by a supermarket, whereas Hoolanhan farm, which is situated on the right side of McGoldrick road,will make way for a car lot.
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, a Farmer’s Market on the bottom left corner of the
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 will no longer be there in the future.
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, apart from an addition of a roundabout at the conjunction between McGoldrick road and that street. Corbin road will be extended beyond that street. the sports centre will be constructed on the bottom right of the
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, there is
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 notable that while a shop to the bottom left will disappear to make for new houses, the old houses and public park remain unaffected.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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