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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays the
way
 we read is transformed through
technology
 as Ebooks. Some people think that
this
technology
 could substitute the traditional newspaper and magazines. I agree that in our modern life everything, as we used to
use
, is changing. On one hand, the
way
 that we do
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things, in general, is changing because
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 the incorporation of
technology
 in our daily life.
Additionally
, some activities are not possible without
technology
such
 as communication, education online, health diagnosis, home office.
Furthermore
, the
way
 we used to read
also
 is changing: we can read a big quantity of books
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 a small device that keeps in our hand,
instead
 to bring them physically. The purpose to
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technology
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 is to make
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life easier.
Consequently
, always would be a replacement in the field that
technology
 was applied.
For example
, the
use
 of computers at work eliminated the
use
 of paper, and now,
this
 is saving a big amount of trees in the world. Another example
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 is communications with the
use
 of computers and the internet the communications could be shorter in time and easier than before. I totally agree that every day
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technology
 is winning more and more space in our daily lives. In fact, sometimes we don´t have options and we have to change from the traditional
way
 to
technology
way
.
For example
, with the pandemic and children's classes, we have to take classes online through the internet. To sum up,
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technology
 and ebooks are changing the
way
 that we used to read.
This
 situation not only will replace the newspapers and magazines in
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 short future, but
also
, the traditional books. I agree with
this
 transformation that we are experienced little by little, but, there are
also
 possibilities to still enjoy reading as the traditional form with a cup of coffee on a rainy day.
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