Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Which one do you agree with? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Leisure
time
is an integral part of human life. It is a common thought that
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free
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ought to be used for mental activities, while others claim the importance of taking a break and even
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during spare
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. I personally consider that
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leisure-
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time
should be spent
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cognitive development as well as relaxation, so
this
time
should
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rationally. Reading books is not a demand of educational institutions, because
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fictions
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are might be considered as part of
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.
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of people spend their free
time
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reading
instead
of chatting or using social media.
Main
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reason is a take their mind off, like breathing
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free air, albeit in
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those who read especially the paperback books are estimated as
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.
This
type of break has a significant effect on concentration,
hence
reading as doing puzzles are usually used in between working or other mental activities.
For instance
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quiz
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speedcubers match
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cube for effective overthinking an answer for
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question. In fact,
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of activities
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not have
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impact on people.
On the other hand
, small pauses like sitting with closed eyes or short-term sleeping can be useful in working places.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • mental stagnation
  • intellectually stimulating
  • relaxation
  • meditation
  • stress reduction
  • overall well-being
  • personal development
  • life satisfaction
  • sense of achievement
  • emotional balance
  • peace of mind
  • scientific evidence
  • memory
  • learning
  • creativity
  • emotional regulation
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