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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Which one do you agree with? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Leisure
time
 is an integral part of human life. It is a common thought that
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free
time
 ought to be used for mental activities, while others claim the importance of taking a break and even
nap
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 during spare
time
. I personally consider that
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leisure-
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leisure time
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time
 should be spent
for
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 cognitive development as well as relaxation, so
this
time
 should
managed
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 rationally. Reading books is not a demand of educational institutions, because
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fictions
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 are might be considered as part of
amusement
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.
Majority
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 of people spend their free
time
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reading
instead
 of chatting or using social media.
Main
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 reason is a take their mind off, like breathing
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free air, albeit in
other view
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 those who read especially the paperback books are estimated as
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.
This
 type of break has a significant effect on concentration,
hence
 reading as doing puzzles are usually used in between working or other mental activities.
For instance
, in
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quiz
games
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 speedcubers match
rubik`s
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 cube for effective overthinking an answer for
given
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 question. In fact,
these kind
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 of activities
do
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 not have
exhausting
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 impact on people.
On the other hand
, small pauses like sitting with closed eyes or short-term sleeping can be useful in working places.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • mental stagnation
  • intellectually stimulating
  • relaxation
  • meditation
  • stress reduction
  • overall well-being
  • personal development
  • life satisfaction
  • sense of achievement
  • emotional balance
  • peace of mind
  • scientific evidence
  • memory
  • learning
  • creativity
  • emotional regulation
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