Some people believe that allowing children to make own choices and everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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autonomy
independence
critical thinking
collective well-being
selfishness
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real-world situations
confidence
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decision-making power
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