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autonomy
independence
critical thinking
collective well-being
selfishness
overemphasis
real-world situations
confidence
self-esteem
boundaries
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moderation
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decision-making power
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Some people believe that allowing children to make own choices and everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

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Many research found that some food and drink products containing bad substance for human, therefore it must be banned from the market. To what extent do you agree or disagree?