It is very clear now that English should be the primary language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different foreign language before English is, in today's world, a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many people argue that children should learn the
English
language
as the
first
priority for their
second
language
after their mother tongue in most countries. If there is not practised in the modern era, it may be more time consuming by learning other languages. In my view, I would argue the essay with the following statements.
First
and foremost, depending on the locations that people are living for, may affect the children's education needs and
requirement
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. In most of the regions, China investments and companies have occupied more percentages than the western ones. By doing so, parents definitely need to select Chinese as their primary foreign
language
in school.
Then
, the babies can get more confidence and fit with the needs in the specific locations.
On the other hand
, those who are communicating the other traditional usage based on their grandparents' guidelines may not need to study any other languages as a foreign
language
. In spite of teaching foreign usages like
English
, it may not be useful for their daily life and even in their work if they decide to re-enter back to their family businesses. In
such
kind of case, learning
English
is going to be an extra effort for them.
In contrast
, every school should include the
first
language
,
English
in the curriculum except their national
language
classes since primary classes. If so, the children are used to with
English
same as their mother tongue and they do not need to study based on the job requirement,
meanwhile
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their ages tend to be in working life.
For instance
, the freshly graduated candidate cannot get easily the job in spite of lacking
English
skills in the interview. To be concluded, every factor has both sides of strength and
weakness
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facts.
Nevertheless
, I strongly disagree with the above-given statement based on the facts that depend on the locations and job requirements.
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