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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter, describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the course suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Not all children perform well in their academics and secure good grades. There are students who struggle to qualify
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 their exams. There are many underlying reasons for poor performance. It is the combined responsibility of the parent and the teacher to identify the causes and help them perform better. So I’m afraid I disagree with the fact that they have to attend after school activities compulsorily. It will not bestow any extra intelligence or give them the wisdom and knowledge that they failed to acquire in their regular classes. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall delve deep into
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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