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Some international companies are very powerful now and many people believe that it is a negative development. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your reasons and relevant examples.

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Nowdays
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, multinational corporations become more and more powerful and able to influence
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global markets and even politics. It could be both positive and negative for
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economic and
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social development.
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 my point of view,
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 outweigh the advantages by now. In the modern world of globalization, we all witness how big companies can displace or merge their business rivals, resulting in
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 in competition. Undoubtedly, large businesses can optimize their costs more effectively and offer better prices. But in the end, when there will be no
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options for consumers, monopolies can put any price they want and use
this
 situation for unlimited enrichment.
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, we can observe the severe energy crisis in Europe, caused by
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 to increase deliveries by the Gasprom company as the major source of gas.
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, at the moment Gas price in Europe has
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its
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 historical maximum. Another
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serious
 threat comes from Social Media giants, which are already controlling the information and
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media content worldwide. Private companies have become a part of state propaganda or sometimes independent political power that manipulates a crowd.
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,
such
 corporations as Facebook, YouTube and Twitter have banned
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former
president
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 Trump forever,
thus
 preventing him from an opportunity to communicate with his supporters. So now he has very limited capabilities to run his next president’s campaign,
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 as many as half of the
americans
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Americans
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 voted for him in 2020. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the growth of huge international enterprises has
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 dramatic negative impact on
economy
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the economy
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 and society all over the world because of
monopolization
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the monopolization
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 of production, services and information.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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