What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the advanced technology, today's population spends their

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on Internet, games or other relevant technological tools.

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situation leads young ones to spend less physical activities. I reckon that to pull out themselves from

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ageing population they should acquire sportive habits.

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and foremost,

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adverse effect of

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is a force to be reckoned with. Nowadays,

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especially generation y and z, think games or social media are an indispensable part of their lives since they spend minimum energy to reach what they want to have.

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, ıf they want to interact with their friends they choose to call them

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of looking up or ıf children want to play a game they prefer

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that on online sites.

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problematic occasions do lots of harm to us. Researches have illustrated, there is a positive correlation between obesity and these advanced machines. Due to the shortage of activity obese population rates have increasingly risen. In earlier years, everyone struggled to reach something,

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can be transportation issues, communicating opportunities or academic problems everyone were exposed to

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action in order to handle their job. When they want to go

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a

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certain place horses or other animals were being

choosen

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or people had to walk. But it has changed with the novelties now people have a tendency to handle whatever they want by sitting.

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, regardless of its beneficial consequences, the more we spend time in front of

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computers the more we

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our active lives. With every new feature of online

platforms

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we meet easier opportunities. Supposedly, ı want to eat tomato and there is a market 400 meters away from me ı choose to order online

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of shopping there. We can see similar examples

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everywhere , but we are the

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who will suffer from that in the long term. In light of the facts recounted above, one of the main thing

why we are different from elderly people

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is because

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better position of our bodies. While our bodies are under good conditions we shouldn't waste

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. To fulfil that, we pick out to go to market on foot, when kids insist on playing a game parents may encourage them to go outside and

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but not least the moment when we want to interact with our friends or families we should take action and talk to them face to face.