Some People believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others Argue that it is better to try and improve such situation.

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In communities have different kinds of people and their perspectives. Few societies inclination for living their life in the same situation either they like it or not

however

there are few other people who always want to enhance their condition ,example better career and strong financial condition.

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the public would be thinking to change their situation but sometimes they back out because of the responsibility they have towards their family ,

Moreover

there are some people who want to take a risk to improve their lives

likewise

: they leave their

job

if it is having a problem or not able to make a satisfactory amount of money and try to find another one. If the

job

is not satisfactory or not making good money

however

you are not able to make your family happy and

moreover

they are

also

not being satisfied with you. uncle was working in a cloth factory for a long time but he is not able to make enough money even though, his family was not happy with him because of these all reasons he was very said and my father advised him to change the

job

based on his experience he will get better

job

He took a risk and that time his family

also

supported him, after few months he got a

job

with good pay. In my opinion, we should take a risk and fight for over happiness afterwards we just need a encourage to ourselves and we can breathe and take it for long happiness. life is not analogous all the time we need to widespread our situation.

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Some People believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others Argue that it is better to try and improve such situation.

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