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Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #managers #decisions #company #employees #process
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 of an organization
is directly depends
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 on
thier
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their
the
staffs
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staff
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 and their
experience
. Some people argue that
decission
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decision
decisions
 should be made by
management
 only, whereas, few other dissidents bring forward the notion that
employees
involvement
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 in
decission
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decision
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 will explain why
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employees
 should
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also
 take part in
decission
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decision
 making. Supervisors are qualified to control the process of working and participate in making significant
decission
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decisions
decision
 in the company.
First
 and foremost,
managers
 have direct contact with
head
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the head
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 of the department,
therefore
, they are aware of the exact mission of the project and
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the requirement
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requirement
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requirements
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 of
top
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the top
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 of the
management
.
As a result
,they can make
best
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the best
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decission
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decision
decisions
 that suits the requirement of the company.
In addition
,
experience
 plays an important role while taking any
decission
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decision
.
Decission
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Decision
Decisions
 making is a
crutial
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crucial
critical
 skill that
managers
 that gained through their
carreer
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career
 journey, while
employees
 may lag in making
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a decision
the decision
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decision
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decisions
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.
Experience
 and knowing exact
need
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needs
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 will help
managers
 to take better
desission
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decision
decisions
.
On the other hand
, workers should be involved in
decission
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decision
 making due to the following reasons. Technical expertise is inevitable in
decission
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decision
 making.
For instance
, a technical person has more insight into the technical aspects of a project,
consequently
, they are able to analyse whether that
decission
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decision
 will lead
of
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 profit or
lose
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loss
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.
Secondly
, Engaging workers in
decission
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decision
 making
helps
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help
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 to enhance employee and employer
relationship
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relationships
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.
Employees
 get a feel that they are important to the company, so, they can work
deligently
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diligently
 for the betterment of the organization. To conclude,
management
 and
staffs
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staff
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 are equally important in a workplace.
Although
 some people say that
managers
 alone can make better
decission
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decision
decisions
 as they have more
experience
 and more contact with
management
,
However
,
i
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 believe that
eployees
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employees
 should
also
 be involved when making any
decission
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decision
decisions
 as it
motivate
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motivates
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 them to work hard and they have more
techincal
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technical
 knowledge.
managers
 and
employees
 knowledge should be incorporated
togther
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together
 to take a precise
decission
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decision
.
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