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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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These days,
the
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advertising is one of the most important factors in part of business driving. From my perspective,
benefits
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the benefits
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 of emphasized advertisement that their products are new in some way outweigh its disadvantage because of
innovation
 and money. The
first
 reason is
innovation
. Nowadays, several businesses try to develop
the
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new
product
 for launching in the market. They think about the way to improve something in
product
 for
claim
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 that
product
 is made from
new
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a new
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 idea which it can help the company to get a more price of
product
such
 as apply the
innovation
 to improve the
product
 to get more interesting. The
second
 reason is money. Telling the
product
 is a new thing that can get more attention from
customer
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customers
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 to try it and
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the
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finally
 it can help the entrepreneur to get more profit than advertising by using the
commonly
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 pattern.
For example
, if the advertisement
inform
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 that products are new which can convince people to pay the money
for
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 try it and the seller can
increasing
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 the prices because they can sell the idea too. In my opinion,
this
 issue is a positive improvement against each of country especially businesses. But the advertising must happen under real information only. In conclusion,
usually
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 give important to tell that
product
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products
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 are new is a positive development because it is the way to induce the market driving by claiming the
product
 is an
innovation
 and it can get more outcome to the business by
persuade
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 the shopper to try the new thing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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