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Some believe that it is beneficial to show foreign films while others feel this can have a negative impact on local culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 believe that it can be beneficial to show
films
 that are not made in their
country
, while others think it can damage that
country
’s
culture
. In my opinion, showing foreign
films
 will affect the perception and
culture
 of a
country
 but those effects are
also
 controllable. On the one hand, proponents of showing foreign
films
 argue that it is both artistic and informative for the
country
.
First
, each
country
 has a different way of filming and setting up scenes, so
this
 can help the film industry in the
country
 and develop it more than before.
Second
, the more foreign videos you watch, the more information you get.
On the other hand
, supporters of the opposite faction think that foreign
films
 can have a negative impact on
culture
. When a foreign film is seen by many
people
 in a society, it is more likely that the film affects members of that community. Take the young
people
 who watch videos produced in other countries as an example,
this
 generation can easily be influenced by these
films
.
Thus
, the
next
 generation is not getting the right
culture
 from their parents. In conclusion, I partly agree with the
first
 group, it has more positive effects than negative.
Besides
, these effects can be controlled by
people
 who like to watch foreign
films
. In
this
 way, we can avoid corrupting the
culture
.
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