Many parents these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?
In disadvantage of
this
contemporary era majority of people prefer to live in developed
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a developed
nation
. They belives that in Fix the agreement mistake
nations
developed
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the developed
a developed
country
they get Fix the agreement mistake
countries
better
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the better
facility
from their native Fix the agreement mistake
facilities
nation
. One school of thoughts
reckons that these days mostly guardians working in another Fix the agreement mistake
thought
nation
and also
they are taking their family with them.In my opinionCorrect article usage
the
development
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,development
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outweigh
out weigh
its advantages. The facts of Correct your spelling
outweigh
thesis
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the thesis
demonstrated
in upcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand, Guardians take their families with themselves for the better future of their children they belives that in another Add a missing verb
are demonstrated
nation
or developed nation
education is much more advanced and developed comparison
to their native Replace the word
compared
nation
. Furthermore
, Parents also
get better
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a better
job
and higher payout in Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
different
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the different
a different
nation
so they can easily feed up his family. For an instance, In Fix the agreement mistake
nations
India
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,India
thier
is less salary is given to Correct your spelling
their
there
employee
according to their qualification Fix the agreement mistake
employees
he
get more payout in another Correct pronoun usage
they
nation
and better living standards.
On the other hand
, parents do not have to leave their country
because if individual famlies
started leaving their home Correct your spelling
families
nation
and moved to another nation
. So the development of nation
that he left Add an article
the nation
a nation
it
becomes slower than usual. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Moreover
, children also
face the migration problem to another country
for their study they get different environment and different laguagle
it will be Correct your spelling
language
effect
on children study Add an article
the effect
an effect
also
on their future. For example
, High
number of students move to Change the article
a High
the High
the
developed countries after completing their high schooling for their better graduation studies but they face lots of problems like language and college environment.
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In Addition
, Mostly graduate people start working for another country
due to the better payout from that nation
but its badly
effect on GDP growth of their home Replace the word
bad
country
and if everyone start
doing so it may be lead to be financial of their native Change the verb form
starts
nation
. As well as, High
number of Change the article
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the High
scientist
start working for Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
developed
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the developed
a developed
nation
because they pay more it makes Fix the agreement mistake
nations
develop
countries to Change the form of the verb
developing
super power
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superpower
nation
not only if they work for their native so they can develop their native Fix the agreement mistake
nations
nation
but also
accomplish difficult
project that was Add an article
a difficult
neccesary
for Correct your spelling
necessary
home
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the home
country
.
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is Replace the word
there
strong
side of Add an article
a strong
the strong
disadvantage
in Correct article usage
the disadvantage
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compared
country
face negative
impact on Add an article
a negative
whole
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the whole
nation
growth and financial loss will be higher then
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than
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expectation
exception
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