Many parents these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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they are taking their family with them.In my opinion
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in upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, Guardians take their families with themselves for the better future of their children they belives that in another
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so they can easily feed up his family. For an instance, In
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get more payout in another
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and better living standards.
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for their study they get different environment and different
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developed countries after completing their high schooling for their better graduation studies but they face lots of problems like language and college environment.
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doing so it may be lead to be financial of their native
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start working for
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because they pay more it makes
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not only if they work for their native so they can develop their native
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growth and financial loss will be higher
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