In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities.Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays people of some countries believe that governments should spend
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amount of budget on constructing high_speed trains.But
on the other hand
, some people are against
this
idea and they think it's much better to spend
those money
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on improving existing
transportation
.So,in the following
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will discuss both viewpoints. On one hand, citizens of some countries
in
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favour of having speedy
transport
system like
:
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trains, because they have an opinion that
transport
system like metro can carry
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number of passengers and
also
amount of good so it will be
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an easy
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way
to shift and communicate with other cities.To cue evidence,in China
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Russia they have advanced
transportation
which
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everything modest for their folks.
Furthermore
, locomotives remarkably reduce traffic congestion in
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.
Finally
,in many
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people ask their governments to
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transportation
budget to fast train lines.
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of
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that demand, others believe that the money should spend on existing
transport
facilities
instead
of merely
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.
For instance
, public
transportation
like:cars,buses and etc play essential role in connecting different parts of cities with each other, and it is convenient
way
to transfer,In fact, public
transport
is always the main
way
to communicate. To conclude, from my point of view the national budget should expand for both of those communication system.I am in favour of developing and enhancing both in an efficient
way
.By the
way
,as far as I'm concerned we will see the massive improvement in
transportation
in foreseeable future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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