Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

It is considered by some that in all stages of education from the beginning to the
last
there is a high amount of time is spent on teaching theoretical subjects, rather than teaching useful and experienced
skills
. I completely agree with
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statement and in
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I will support my view with examples. There is no doubt about the importance of facts,
however
,
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practical
skills
considered
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more important.
For instance
,
students
who have more practical
skills
can address and overcome the problems in their future more
rabidly
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. When the
students
complete their teaching stage and begin to encounter the outside life, they will be able to
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involved in the community faster than the other kind of
students
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do not have any kind of practical experience.
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, having enough practical experience could lead to open new horizons which could create a capable generation with the ability
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develop
students
’ imagination and make them prosper in their
career
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.
For example
,
students
are required to participate actively in practical activities which could help them more in their life after they finished their education
,
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because it could increase their confidence and
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more opportunities to them in the future. In conclusion,
however
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there is too much time spent on teaching the theoretical information to the
students
, my view
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high amount of time in teaching practical
skills
is essential for the
students
,
this
is because it could help them in their future with high possibilities of success in their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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