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Mrs Barrett, an english-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

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Dear
Mrs.
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 Barrett, I am writing in regard to an announcement you have made recently for someone available for help for the
next
 summer in your dwelling. I would like to express my interest in
this
 opportunity,
thus
, let me elaborate on why I am qualified for
vacancy
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the vacancy
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.
Initially
, I am 22 years old,
hence
, I am full of energy and
dynamic
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 young person.
This
 must ensure that I will be fine with long and labour-demanding works in your yard. I am quite handy with a shovel and other garden tools,
furthermore
, possessing
high
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 level of understanding
in
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 plants.
Therefore
, your trees in the yard will grow healthier and well-cared.
Secondly
, among my peers, I am the only one that can speak English fluently. As you are
English-speaking
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 person and experiencing
a
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trouble with
local
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 language, we will not realise any communication problems.
Consequently
, I could understand tasks you would attain to me, so I can carry them out the same quality as you wish. Considering these above, I assume I will make
a
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good use
for
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 your house jobs. I am available for the
next
 summer as my classes in holiday break and I would charge
minimal
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 hourly rate for my service.
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