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Nowadays, people get information through news and papers, but meanwhile are uncertain about the truth of these news. Should we believe the journalists? What qualities should a good journalist or correspondent have?

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 technological era , a vast section of society receive information through
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exceedingly paramount to all person due to without them they cannot get prominent
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them .To be precise, they are merely
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 of getting indispensable
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journalist
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 it is a serious thing and
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country's
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 future. It is a most powerful tool to get develops our country. By agglomerating
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 pen down saying that
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 .It is very important for
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 deterioration ,all masses follow them and it would be
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 impact to our region.
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