It is often said that governments spend too much money on project to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

In
21st
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century
wildlife
is extinct in some particular region whereas in some
region
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regions
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it is near about vanish. Nowadays,
this
topic has become a hot topic
in
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all around the
world
. One school of thought reckons that
governments
had spent a large amount of money to conserve
wildlife
, while there are lots of
another problems
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other problems
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that are much more important than
wildlife
projects. I completely agree with
this
given notion. The facts of the thesis are demonstrated in upcoming paragraphs. Consider Broadly,
wildlife
is an important part of
earth
life cycle every living being that
are
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living on
earth
is attached with each other either directly or indirectly.
Governments
know
this
thing very well if they did not maintain the lifecycle of
wildlife
it may be harmful
for
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everyone. For an instance, in
whole
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world
the cutting of trees and
forest
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forests
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is increasing day by day due to
this
activity at large scale number
earth
had
losted
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lost
important animal species that are important for human
being
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beings
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like in
medical
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sector.
In addition
, the other problems that are
occuring
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occurring
in
world
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is
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not much important
then
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than
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conserving
wildlife
because if any life cycle is disturbed in
earth
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there will be high chances of natural disaster on
earth
.
For example
, global warming is happening on
earth
and
temperature
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of
earth
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the earth
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is continuously increasing daily due to high increments in temperature glacier start melting and rivers or ocean start overflowing and more chances of floods are
occuring
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occurring
in
world
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.
Moreover
, animals
also
help to test the
new
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developed medicine because
human
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the human
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being was
also
an animal in past times
its
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it
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now changed due to the genetic changes done by nature. To illustrate, Covid - 19 vaccine
first
trials
done
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were done
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on rats because rats
has
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seen the same
genectic
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genetic
genes by scientists. To conclude,
wildlife
is the foremost important thing for
governments
nowdays
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relatively another problem is not much
neccesary
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necessary
.
Wildlife
is an important part of
earth
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lifecycle so,
governments
are focusing to conserve
wildlife
.
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  • conservation efforts
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem health
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental degradation
  • interconnectivity
  • inherently linked
  • quality of human life
  • effective government spending
  • complement each other
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