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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is this? What are the best ways to reduce this problem?

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Sometimes
people
 face a necessity for travelling abroad in order to get a degree, maintain their job and live for a while which boils down to the problem
such
 as homesickness.In
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 I will explain what is the cause and outline some solutions.
Firstly
,
people
 start to miss their homes because of losing support from close
people
. A new place where individuals do not know anyone can be sometimes stressful.
For example
, when a student after high school starts to live by themselves in a foreign country without knowing a language could feel confused.
Conversely
,back at home, it would be easier for a student to integrate into
an
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adult life with supportive parents behind him/her. The main solution is making new friends in the new place. When
people
 ,who moved to the new place, start to communicate to local residents challenges they faced before become less complicated.
For example
, my friend .who moved to Venice due to her bachelor degree, at
first
 cried a lot and felt like someone who really miss her home and would return as soon as possible.
However
, she started to get in touch with her Italian neighbours and
then
 realized how friendly they are.
As a result
,you can make
the
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acquaintance
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whereve
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wherever
 you are, so you do not feel
loneliness
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 and stop missing your home. To sum up, some
people
 feel
homesickness
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 when they are separated from their houses for some period of time.
Nevertheless
,
people
 can get through those concerns by chatting with humans who surround them at the destination.
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