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The graph depicts trends in the number of auto per household in the United Kingdom during a 36-year period. Between 1971 and 2007, automobile ownership in the United Kingdom grew overall. The percentage of
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 without a car decreased. In 1971, over half of all British families did not own a car. Only approximately 7% of households owned
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, compared to 44 per cent who had one. Families with three or more transportation were unusual, with only around 2% of ordinary falling into
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 without an automobile, which declined progressively during the 36-year period by around 25% in 2007.
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 increased gradually, reaching over 26% in 2007, while the share of
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 with more than two convertible increased to around 5%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Pronunciation
  • Fluency
  • Brain plasticity
  • Cultural awareness
  • Globalized world
  • Proficiency
  • Educational opportunities
  • Motivation
  • Resource constraints
  • Specialized teachers
  • Academic pressure
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum balance
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