The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world citie can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. In order to reverse this decline in quality of life in cities, attempts must be made to encourage people to use their cars less and public transport more. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, in our society
children
have less connection with their
parents
due to both
parents
are working ,and it makes problems in their relationship. I want to render some reasons and suggest to my opinion about
this
decision. On the one hand, those who support
this
idea claim that both
parents
work
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outside of
home
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the home
a home
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can cause various problems.
Firstly
, these days the living cost is increasing and
parent
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parents
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have to
work
to prepare a better life for their
children
.
For instance
, if
children
want to go
Privet
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to Privet
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University ,or they want to have a better
educational
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education
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their
parent
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parents
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need
paying
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to pay
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good money for them.
Although
they are working together to earn extra money, they cannot
enough
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have enough
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free time and
this
might have a negative impact on
children
.
Secondly
, while both
parents
are working,
children
may be lonely at home and if
parents
neglect to control their
children
in order to lack attention may direct
children
to criminal activities. For
this
reason, at least one of two
parents
should be staying more time at home , and they are nurturing as well as they can.
On the other hand
, when
parents
don’t spend enough time
for
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on
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children
‘s upbringing, especially mother.
Although
children
want
the
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a
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high quality of life facility, they need more
parents
attention and support than anything else. For one
thing
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,thing
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children
need emotional
interact
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interaction
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with their
parent
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parents
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and
parents
have significant impacts on the process of shaping the personalities of their
children
. When
Children
are working with
parents
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their parents
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they feel much more confident and independent and
this
is helpful to their future life.
In addition
, sometimes
parent
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parents
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are like working and they want to be more socialized So they can help from babysitters, or with grandparents
also
parent
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parents
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make
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makes
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balance
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a balance
the balance
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between
work
and family. I believe that while
parent
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the parent
a parent
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is working as a professional
work
it brings more advantages to the
children
Financial situation of the whole family will be improved,
children
can learn hard
work
from their
parents
and
also
it has many benefits for the
parents
themselves. In conclusion, if
parents
balance between
work
and family their
children
’s development are certain to be guaranteed.
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