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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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New houses are required for people, but there is little room without
village
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a village
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. Many individuals believe that
villages
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 should be protected.
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 essay agrees with
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 opinion as the destruction of
villages
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 will lead to
loss
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 of farming
land
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 and building house will
result
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loss
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 of scenic
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as a result
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. One of the biggest disadvantages to
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a house
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house
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houses
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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 will be
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loss
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the loss
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 of farming
land
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.
Loss
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 of farming
land
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 will lead to
poor
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a poor
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 living
standard
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standards
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 for farmers and the
food
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price
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prices
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 increase for the locals. So, building houses in
village
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the village
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 is a self-destructive option in my view.
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, the
food
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 price, especially rice,
have
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 increased by 20% in Bangladesh during
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last
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the last
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 decade, which has
caused
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been caused
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 due to the drop of farming
land
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 in
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the village
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village
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villages
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 according to
Bangladesh
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the Bangladesh
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 Rice Research Institute.
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, the farming
land
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 use for
building
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the building
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 is not viable.
Besides
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, these
villages
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 are the main source of our daily
food
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 in case of losing
farm
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farmland
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land
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; imported
food
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source
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sources
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 will increase the price of
food
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 and our living standard
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. Another disadvantage is the
loss
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 of scenic
beauty
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 of
villages
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.
Scenic
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A scenic
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 green environment will be lost if the building homes
encouraged
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are encouraged
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 inside
countryside
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the countryside
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. These
villages
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 attract lots of visitors from foreign as well as city dwellers, which helped to improve the economy of the
villages
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.
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significant
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 amount of visitors cause of its scenic
beauty
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 according to the Daily Mirror of Bangladesh. In conclusion, building
house
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houses
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 in the countryside could be a terrible idea as
villages
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 will be losing farming
land
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 and will
subsequently
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 lead to
lack
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a lack
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 of
food
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source
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sources
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 and losing scenic
beauty
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 will not help to improve our living
standard
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standards
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