Children can learn effectively through watching TV. Therefore children should be encouraged to watch TV regularly both at home and at school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

With the advanced technological tools, the use of
television
has increasingly raised. In today, children use it to watch movies, documentaries, etc. Some people advocate that if our offsprings watch
this
device they can learn so much new knowledge. I disagree with
this
argument that these machines adversely affect kids' learning capacity and undermine their interests in the environment.
First
and foremost,
television
do lots of harm to younger ages, it turns them
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addicted since they spend most of their
time
in front of it.
For instance
, after they come back the
school
initially
many kids have a tendency to
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, but
instead
of
this
attitude they can fulfil their homework and
then
if their parents let them, they can watch the displays. Even though some people still are of the opinion that these products should be used at
school
, as well. During the pandemic we have seen that learning from computers or
television
only made the situation worse,
thus
, if we encourage teachers to allow our offspring to watch
this
device during
school
time
, they won't see any restriction to access it.
Such
devices can provide convenient displays,
such
as documentaries and kids can increase learning capacity, but ,
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can not be efficient on
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own.
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to that, They will utilize
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it not only by learning documentarys' knowledge
also
spend too much
time
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watching unnecessary things.
On the other hand
, spending an excessive amount of
time
on
television
prevents them from hanging around, reading a book, making a sport and doing other different useful activities. Sitting in front of it at long hours poses a serious threat to health in the long term. Having spent so much date at faculty they expose to sit and afterwards, if they insist to retain it they start to turn into a habit after a few years these heirs become more likely to struggle with diseases. Except for physical
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they don't pick out to meet friends or play a game with peers in order to don't leave the scene.
This
problematic situation leads them to effect in a psychological way. The more remote from their peers the more they stay alone. To sum up,
television
's adverse challenges on our heirs is a force to be reckoned with.
Instead
of encouraging teachers or managers to enable students to watch it at
school
, we should take precautions at home in order to prevent their access to it so that they can learn from their environments,
such
as educators or families and they can save much more
time
to meet their friends or whomever they want and can do more beneficial activities.
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