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In many countries, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic men and women should share the housework tasks equally(like cleaning and looking after children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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An increasing number of
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 are indeed entering the workforce and some argue that
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 modification entitles wives the right to share their housework with husbands evenly. I would agree with the idea that men and
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 should undertake household duties together but in a more
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practical
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way
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 rather than equally distributing the tasks. While a higher proportion of
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 are stepping forward in their careers, it is justifiable to make men contribute more to housekeeping. There was a time that when most females stayed at home and cared for other family members, while their counterparts
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 charge of issues mostly
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outside
 the house. Today, the roles have changed by
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 transforming
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breadwinner
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 of the family. With
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 being partaken by workplaces and their contribution to the domestic income, their obligations of house chores should
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 be allocated to, in
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 circumstances, their spouses.
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, both genders of the families would enjoy a balanced life between
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 and home, which can benefit their relationships and children's education.
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, working full-time does not indicate the intensify of
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. Some full-time employees devote considerable effort to their jobs and often have to
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 overtime, while others, following a nine-to-five schedule, face little pressure. When taking
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 differences into consideration, the one with less workload
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 should do more housework.
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, one party may have a brighter professional prospect
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 the other, in which case, the one expecting less career advancement can dedicate more time and energy to home-making and child-rearing. In
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 way, the family chores are taken care of, at the same time, the main breadwinner can guarantee a better economic status of a family. In conclusion, we cannot
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 say that a couple should equally divide their household chores if they both
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 full-time. There are more practical ways to make a fair distribution of domestic tasks.
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