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There should be a complete ban for advertising. So that we can benefit from its negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#ban #benefit #effects
Many
people
 are exposed to a large number of
advertisements
 today and persuaded to buy all kinds of products. Some suggest that the government should forbid all
the
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advertisements
. I disagree with
this
 idea;
nonetheless
, some regulations against advertising are needed. It is not appropriate to simply prohibit advertising entirely since there are a lot of
advertisements
 that can benefit our lives.
Firstly
,
advertisements
 that provide authentic
information
 can help
people
 better choices when shopping. As an important source of
information
 that can help customers make well-informed decisions when choosing products previously unfamiliar to them, banning informative
advertisements
 could lead buyers to make wrong decisions, which can waste their time and money.
Moreover
, there are companies that only promote beneficial products
such
 as wholesome food and educational books. These kinds of
advertisements
 can help
persuading
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people
, especially teenagers and children, to build balanced dietary habits and read more books, which can yield health benefits and are of educational value.
Therefore
, banning advertising completely is certainly not a good idea.
On the other hand
, tough regulations need to be imposed on
advertisements
 linked to
behavioral
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 problems.
People
 tend to develop habits or lifestyles by copying
behaviors
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 they observe in their lives and in the media.
Therefore
,
advertisements
 with violent imagery and sexual content should be eliminated. Other than
this
, the government can regulate stringent laws against companies that propaganda exaggerated or even false
information
. A large amount of
fine
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 or even imprisonment can serve as a deterrent to prevent unethical advertisers
deceiving
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 consumers. TO conclude, we cannot simply forbid advertising entirely since
they
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it
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 can be informative and educational, but
advertisements
 with inappropriate content and false
information
 should be regulated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pervasive
  • Consumerism
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Manipulation
  • Information dissemination
  • Free media
  • Economic growth
  • Stricter regulations
  • Ethical guidelines
  • Consequences
  • Innovation
  • Nuanced position
  • Regulatory measures
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