A local college wants people with a job to come and talk to students about what it is like to work. You would like to come forward and talk to the students about your job. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter, • explain what you would like to talk about • say why students would be interested in your job • suggest a possible date and time for the talk

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing you
this
letter to get your attention,
becouse
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because
I would like to offer myself to speak in front of the students regarding my job, as I
konw
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know
you are looking for people that already have experience in
work
.
First
of
all
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I
work
in the hair industry as a barber/hairdresser, and I would like to explain and share my
expirience
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experience
thoughout
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throughout
the years of
work
with the students. if possible I would like to tell them
also
the stress and rewards the job can give them, so they can be ready for anything.
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I would like to create some
intrest
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interest
for them
regading
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regarding
some reasons, because it can be really creative,
for example
, the use of colours and different style can be combinate with it, and
also
bring some of my
work
to show them how cool and funky they can be. I
also
would like to suggest a time if possible and it can be during the week as I know is where the whole students are in school possibly on a
monday
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morning, is where hairdressers have their days off. I hope you will consider my offer, I am looking forward to hearing from you.
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Your
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faithfully, Tiziano
piva
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