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in many countries the amount of crime is increasing what do you think are the main causes of crime? how can we del with those causes?

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nations
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 that a number of violent actions have risen
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a few years ago. In my perspective view, I can observe numerous
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reasons which they are lead to
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several types of crimes. In the following lines, both
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major purposes and solutions will be discussed.
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 with, all of
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individuals
individauls
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 need to live in a piece life.
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, sometimes there are actions that
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 outside of their reactions attitude. The
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 cause, can I mention is deteriorating economic conditions that means, If citizens lose the main factor to live which is the fund, they will be
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 to
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 any
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 whatever what is
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behavior
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 just to being
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. The
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 reason, some
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youngsters
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 have affected by
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 individuals especially those who
are have
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 psychological problems,
this
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 healthy issue leads to depression and
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 to
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, most of them become drugs
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addicted
.
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, the demonstrated causes have mentioned above, there are solutions to decreasing from these reasons.
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, governments have to discover the root causes for the
highly
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 crimes and according to that, authorities can help
those criminal
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 along with a small business for each one of them by a small budget and the remaining amount will be charged to
goverments
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governments
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 until the money is paid.
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, public figures and media have to lunch
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awareness
campaings
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campaigns
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 about the
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 of those crimes and encourage the community to help and give financial support to poor people. In conclusion, as I discussed earlier, violate
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 is increasing
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day after
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day, the major reason in my opinion is the deteriorating of
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economic
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. In
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, the psychological situation is
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 another helpful factor for
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a
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number of criminal persons.
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, there are several solutions,
goverments
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governments
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 and other riching people who can assist
those criminal
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 to change their
live
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 to better and live in peace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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