the media is the reason why we are all obsessed with our physical appearance. how far do you agree with this statement`

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It is often said that the
media
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is one of the most important
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of human
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and it can
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relationships, feelings and
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. The
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is the reason why we are all obsessed with our physical appearance.
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and
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a concluding idea. In recent years, The
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has affected a large
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of
people
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’s lives, many
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have
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their income and work from The
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too much time in the virtual world causes us to follow and watch alien persons
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but, there is a few
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of their
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. Most
of
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the
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people
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are impressed by the perfection of the lives of the
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they see in The
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, it can even start with the appearance so,
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plastic surgery will begin. Plastic surgeries are not bad if they are not extreme. Anything that makes a person feel good about her body and love herself more,
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is good but sometimes some
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can not control themselves and They become addicted to beauty surgeries and make their appearance artificial.
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Thoughtless decisions lead to events that are difficult or impossible to compensate for. These outcomes are from decisions without search and without thought.
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, there are some
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that they have enough control
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their
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and their decision and they get not involved with The
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but most of the
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are
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to found new things. To conclude, we should know that everything that we see
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social
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it
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is not real and it is just a few
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of
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’s
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. So, we should love
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ourselves
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with all the bad and good things.
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