Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Opinions are divided on whether humans who enter the career market soon and keep dedication to
this
job
are more likely to get a pleasing working life than those who work
in different positions. I strongly agree with this
idea because they definitely have a defined career path and get a high promotion.
It is a well-known fact that joining businesses early can makes
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make
people
accumulate experiences and gain job
satisfactions
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satisfaction
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, therefore,
therefore
leads to keep doing this
work
. As the matter of fact, the more time they spend, the more potential customers they will get. This
brings them a lot of benefits not only in making money but also
in increasing work
productivities. In Vietnam, for example
, many young people
have started their businesses immediately after graduating from university and quickly made a name for themselves. Thus
, it is important for people
to engage in the job
market as soon as possible.
Secondly
, people
who find employment early are more likely to have a better occupation prospects
. Correct the article-noun agreement
better occupation prospects
a better occupation prospect
In other words
, after a while making
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of making
contribution
to Add an article
a contribution
work
, they will sharpen their skills and abilities, which means they can receive a better promotion or even play a leadership role. In additions
, they may have a Fix the agreement mistake
addition
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chance
change
to enter international markets that will Correct your spelling
chance
benefits
them a lot. Change the verb form
benefit
For example
, people
who stay in one field can learn from their mistakes, enhance productivity and move up the career ladder. Therefore
, having a
early Change the article
an
job
is vital.
In conclusion, I believe that people
who choose a job
early and keep doing it will advance quickly and be happier than those who frequently change jobs. Hence
, the give
statement seems very rational.Change the verb form
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