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Why is feminism so successful in Taiwanese society and what are the problems it makes?

Feminism
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 is a hot topic in recent years, and it is happening in the United
States
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 and
Taiwan
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, but it is not happening in
Japan
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, we all agree
Japan
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 is strong in many aspects. The most obvious is Japanese tourism and Japanese culture, including animation, music, food, etc., is
also
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 integrated into the lives of
Taiwanese
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 people. In terms of sports competitions, Japanese volleyball, Kou Shien, basketball, professional e-sport, etc. all win
Taiwan
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, but only the
women
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’s rights are low (Shu-Lan Zhuang, 2014).
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,
Taiwanese
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feminism
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 has been very strong in
gender
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 equality issues in recent years. But the question is what does it make
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 happen? In
this
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 essay, we will understand why
Taiwanese
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feminism
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 is so successful in
society
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 and what makes the “
Princess
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 Syndrome” issues in young ladies.
Taiwanese
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feminism
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 is successful in national
society
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, with more than a quarter female members of Congress and the
first
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 president (BBC, 2016). These achievements make
Taiwan
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’s feminist rights ranked fourth in the world. In
Taiwan
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, 87.3% and 75.1% of men and
women
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 over the age of 25 received high-level education and there is no difference in high-level education between the male and females. In a
neighboring
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 country
Japan
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, men receive as high as 91.7% of high-level education, but only 79.4% for
women
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. The historical issues of
Japan
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 are still more serious in
Japan
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 than in
Taiwan
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 and
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 the main reason why
Taiwan
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 can surpass
Japan
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 and in
feminism
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.
However
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, the United
States
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, which is the best example of a democratic country but ranks 38th in the global
gender
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 inequality index. The main reason is that the United
States
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 has a higher crude birth rate of underage
girls
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, which decreased the ranking of the United
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.
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, the proportion of female congressmen in the United
States
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 is only 17%. And it is not outstanding enough in global performance. But why
feminism
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 is so successful in
Taiwan
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, did feminists in
Taiwan
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 do anything?
Taiwanese
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 feminist has worked on it and hardly for a half-century, a famous feminist woman name Fan-Yun organized the history of
Taiwanese
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feminism
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 history, The
first
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stage
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 of
feminism
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 Anne Lu proposed new
feminism
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 in 1971, and
secondly
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 is the
stage
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 of expansion which means
women
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's News Magazine was established in 1982, The
third
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stage
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 of diversified development unlocked in 1987, and the fourth
stage
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 from the differentiation routes to the establishment the female right on
society
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 from 1990 until now. As we mentioned earlier,
feminism
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 in
Taiwan
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 was prevalent after the 90s, so
children
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 born after the 90s, especially
girls
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, were born in a full of
feminism
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 era, they have not experienced what is
gender
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 inequality. In
Taiwan
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,
women
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 have the same rights as men. Because of
this
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,
girls
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 are loved like
princesses
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 by patients, and
children
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 born in the 1990s grew up watching
Disney
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 animations, the prince saves the trapped
princess
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 fairy tells affects
girls
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 deeply, so it causes another issue called “
Princess
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 Syndrome” (Ciara-lee Durand, 2015). To cultivate the temperament of their daughters, many parents dress their
children
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 like "
princesses
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" from an early age, but is being a
princess
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 the best choice for a
girl
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? According to a survey conducted by the journal "Child Development" (Wen-No Wu, 2018), the role of
princesses
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 will have a "
gender
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 frame effect" on young
children
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, which will hurt their
future
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 lives. Those
girls
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 who play with
Disney
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princesses
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 will have more obvious
gender
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 stereotypes after one year. They want to look like
princesses
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 more than
others
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 and they feel less confident. These
girls
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 who like
princesses
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 usually don't like to play games outside because they are afraid of getting dirty and think that they have no "femininity" in
this
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 way. To cultivate the temperament of their daughters, many parents dress their
children
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 like "
princesses
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" from an early age, but is being a
princess
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 the best choice for a
girl
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? According to a survey conducted by the journal "Child Development"(Sarah M. Coyne, 2019), the role of
princesses
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 will have a "
gender
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 frame effect" on young
children
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, which will harm their
future
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 lives. Those
girls
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 who play with
Disney
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princesses
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 will have more obvious
gender
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 stereotypes after one year. They want to look like
princesses
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 more than
others
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 and they feel less confident. These
girls
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 who like
princesses
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 usually don't like to play games outside because they are afraid of getting dirty and think that they have no "femininity" in
this
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 way. They
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 believe that being a
girl
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 means that her life will have different opportunities
such
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 as a handsome rich man will get into my life in the
future
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. If parents encourage
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 kind of stereotyped
behavior
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, it will affect
girls
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 long-term. The researchers
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 said that
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 kind of "feeling oneself
princess
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girl
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 " is more likely to give up on challenging things, may not want to work in the
future
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, and will be particularly concerned about her shape. But boys who have been immersed in
Disney
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 cartoons since childhood have a more positive impact. Research has found that boys who like to play with
Disney
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 toys are more confident in their bodies and more kind to
others
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 the reasons are quite interesting, but we are not going to discuss
this
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 today (Sarah M. Coyne, 2019). In summary, the rise of
feminism
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 is a good thing for
society
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 in
Taiwan
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, but a part of
women
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 will use
this
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 advantage to achieve personal benefits (Shu-Lan Zhuang, 2014). They don’t want to work hard to get results, it is unfair to
others
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, and it is unacceptable.
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, how to find a perfect balance between the two will be a very important topic for feminists, not just for
Taiwanese
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 feminists but for all over the world, to find a true pathway thought equality
gender
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 in the
future
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.

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