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“Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?” Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Co-curriculum
activities
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 are gaining popularity these days, more and more schools are inculcating them in their school curriculum. I strongly believe that they are paramount for
students
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 as they have proven to be efficacious for participant's
life
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 because they are responsible for the holistic growth of the child. Gone are the days, when being academically excellent was enough for a successful future.
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, nowadays,
students
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 are expected to possess additional
skills
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such
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 as interpersonal, leadership
skills
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, and so on. They can gain these
skills
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 by actively participating in
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extra-classroom
activities
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. For an instance, studies conducted on school-aged
students
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 have shown that
students
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 who take part in these
activities
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 are more confident, and they have strong communication and leadership
skills
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;
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 gives them an upper edge in their career later in their
life
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.
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, diversity in the clubs and extra-classroom
activities
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 plays a significant role in the student's
life
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;
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allow
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 them to interact with the diverse group,
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 promoting them to become socially intelligent, and responsible adults.
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, participation in the ethnic clubs, make them feel connected with their culture and allowed them to gain knowledge and understanding of other cultures.
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, the interaction through these
activities
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helpsin
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helps in
help in
helps
 the development of friendship and a higher sense of belonging to school and community. Overall, these
activities
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 have a positive impact on the adolescent's
life
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; It allows them to be a better person at
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 early age.
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, they must be encouraged to take part in
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activities
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, whether
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 sports, clubs or school-based problem.
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